Proof that first submissions can be GOOD!
Look at the quality of this movie, and it's his first submission! This is PROOF that the ONLY excuse for crappy movies is lack of effort. If all first submissions to the Portal were as good as this, Newgrounds would be a better place. The author obviously put a lot of effort into this, and made sure he had something good to submit to the Portal, not just some tweened-stick-piece-of-crap. Jason Whalley, I think your movie inspired me to start working on my first movie again (I got distracted by StarCraft and my computer is unreliable), because it reminded me that if I work hard, I can make a quality movie. Now, here's where you can improve. The frame-by-frame animation at the beginning is pretty good, use more of it because it looks cool. The characters look good when farther away, but kinda weird close-up. Simplifying the character design might fix that. Using your own voice-acting was a good choice, it definitely adds quality, but the recordings were quiet and not as good as they could be. See if you can find a sound-editing program to fix the volume and such. Also, remember that voice-acting is "acting," so when you start to make more dramatic scenes be sure to make the voices believable. Since this is an internet flash series, a deep plot isn't very possible, but just try to avoid making a cliché vampire story (as most vampire stories tend to be). Anyway, good work. Jeez, I think this is the first time I've been able to give a good, constructive review to someone's first submission... because, frankly, most of them suck.